At the begining the situation was horrible, it couldn`t have been worst. First of all we lost Peter he didn`t survived the crash and lost his head out. the pilot is really hurt. She`s broken her legs and she`s unable to do any move. We tried to do something about it and she`s better now but still with so much pain. I also had a couple of wounds. Romina helped me with that and fortunately they weren`t very serious.
After two or three hours of the crash, when we felt a little better we decided the next step to follow because obviously we had to do something to get out of there. the only thing we could find in the rests of the plane was a little map that shows the places round the crash site. we decided that we couldn`t stay all uf us together so we divided the group in two teams. In one of those were Romina and me and in the other team Cote and Pato.
The first thing we thought after of analize the map was that we should go to the road to see if we could find somethiing or someone there, so Cote and Pato went to find out.
As we saw that were smoke coming from the deep of the forest me and Romina set off in that direction hoping that the fire should belong to people and no to a forest fire...
2 comments:
I think your use of tenses is excellent here Jose Luis and your story is completely believable.
A few things to consider:
his head was chopped off instead of "he lost his head out".
Two or three hours after the crash rather than "After two or three hours of the crash".
...thing we thought after analyzing the map... instead of "...thing we thought after of analize the map...".
As we saw that there was smoke rather than "As we saw that were smoke".
Hello!...
Yes, I think we're gonna die!
Seriously! :)
I don't think that the plan is going to work ... I think that the alligatos are gonna eat us xD
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